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Reviewer: Odysseus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 18 2023 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 5 - The Aftermath

This whole story is great. I'm interested to see Leah introduced. Maybe she isn't as nice as she seems and she keeps him trapped in her butt while she teaches. Or maybe Sophia just decides to keep him and flys to Perth with him between her cheeks. 

Reviewer: combine45 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 11 2023 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Aftermath

I appreciate the fact that Sophia didnt Immediately turn on and kill her BF when he was out off by the tiny crushing. I've ready enough of these stories that I felt that cliché coming and its more of a twist now whem it doesn't happen. Eager to see where this goes. The tension builds.

Reviewer: kbDArt Signed [Report This]
Date: May 11 2023 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Aftermath

Great chapter. Loving the story and where this seems headed. The shrinky’s anger management is going to be his demise, methinks. One suggestion - for describing internal thoughts, you might wanna switch from single apostrophe quotes to simply using italics. I noticed some of the best authors doing so and switched to doing so on my stories after about my 2nd completed story. Note - the mechanics for editing a chapter here are very easy.

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