[Report This]Date: May 10 2023 6:06 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Her First
Whoa! This is hot!
Is this actually your first story?! You write like a veteran! I love the world building and the background information about the virus.
That first section with the 3 young women was amazing! I love how you made it seem as if they were giggling at the main character, but actually it was toward a little guy. It was clever and I am wondering if you are planning more scenes with other characters rather than just the main character and Sophia now.
Also, the way you create suspense is phenomenal! I’m literally at the edge of my seat for each chapter, and it’s exciting and makes me nervous of all the shrunken guys and I love it! Even the little flashback scene with Greg’s friends was amazing! Love how they got taken 1 by 1.
For the 3 girls scene, I liked how they acted similar but slightly different. Usually when there’s a giantess group, their personalities are complete polar opposites, but this feels more realistic. Hannah was the nice but teasing one. Ellen was the teasing, but dominant one. And Clare was the teasing and sadistic one. They all teased Greg similarly, but had their own ideas of what to do with him. Amazing!
The scenes with Sophia were amazing! The dialogue is top tier! The foreshadowing about swallowing him whole and then the part where you explain how the rich could take advantage of this situation and then state that Sophia is rich. I knew something would happen, but I didn’t expect that, so I loved how you presented everything so far.
Man, I’m in love with the start of this story! Right now I’m just hoping for some more stories with other shrunken guys and perhaps more kinky scenes. Otherwise, perfect start so far and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Yep, long time reader first time writer!
Thanks for your feedback and review - I hope to make this vary a lot with some interesting characters!