Giantess World
Reviews For Reduction & Relocation: Becca Young
Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: October 21 2022 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 2 - A Phone Call [September 29th, 2005]
Date: October 21 2022 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 2 - A Phone Call [September 29th, 2005]
First the usual...
"syllabus It" (missing '.')
"whenthey"
The more you insist on describing Mrs Jensen's features, the more I want to see her participate... maybe some student is looking for a summer job, maybe her nephew is an intern at R&R and she's doing her a favor, (checks old story) maybe we can fix Mr Handsome Waiter disappearing from the story... :D
And I see that Becca herself wonders why someone would let themselves etc - good to see I'm not the only one who forgot about uninformed
Reviewer: D W Signed 
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Date: October 21 2022 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 2 - A Phone Call [September 29th, 2005]
Author's Response:
[Report This]Date: October 21 2022 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 2 - A Phone Call [September 29th, 2005]
Again, great story; but is it "$200 per week" or "$500 per week"? You wrote both payments within a few paragraphs since you are concerned about continuity.
Regardless, absolutely fantastic story.
Author's Response:
Ugh...its going to keep happening.. thanks