[Report This]Date: August 17 2022 2:45 PM Title: Setting Out
Really liking the characters in this story so far even if I'm not really into humiliation. Kind of hoping Vann performs the growing spell on Tyra instead since it would make more sense with her physical strength and also because I wanna see more Tyra action but you didnt hear that from me. Also is it me or is Zenovia slowly becoming attracted to Vann?
Author's Response:
The growing spell is definitely the Chekhov's Gun of the story, like Tyra said the growing spell on her makes a lot more sense, but Eletha just wants to be big and mean so bad lol. Yes Zenovia is coming around to her new champion in more ways than one.
[Report This]Date: August 17 2022 6:23 AM Title: Setting Out
Another great chapter, I enjoyed the world building and character development, specifically with regards to Dwarven society and their advancements, as well as Chadwicks other ravings. It helps the world feel more fleshed out and lived in.
It was also nice to see that party work together as a team and too see how they interact with Vann on his first adventure. I wonder if they will meet their match soon, even with Vanns new power.
I also appreciated the reference to your other story "Abduction", perhaps the toxin helped him see into other universes lol.
The scene with Eletha and Vann was also nice and steamy, it was great to see her dominant side, and a nice cherry on top with him begging for her panties.
Loving the story so far, I'm always eager to read more.
Author's Response:
Like most RPG adventures you rarely see the most powerful enemies first. Most of the girls in this story will get to show their dominant sides with Vann, it's how he powers up! Anyways as always thanks for the review.
[Report This]Date: August 16 2022 6:03 AM Title: Setting Out
Now that was a fun 4th wall break.
And the various things dwarves are evidently up to. Quite advanced getting to germ theory and it being heard all the way out there, if they even visit a truly big city or capital, bet all the doctors and healing will be mentioning it and how to have healing spells with it in mind. If they need to get new healing spells. And more of the dwarven ‘nonsense’, plus what others may have come up with that's similar.
Rumana’s going to be important later isn’t she.
Back sith the rituals thing, Zenovia must have come up with so many rituals during her horny has about her followers, it would be curious enough to eventually learn what she removed/left out of her book, and what she left in, considering what rituals are already there and how her followers acted back when. Some could have even taken that magic for a different goddesses or demons or such of their own use. Means some divine legal battle has to happen over taking her spell for a different high being used. So that's another task for the pile , destroying those ‘corrupted’/heretical versions’. In some way. And other divine catching’s up she’ll have to do now that she's awake.
And other leftovers, if someone is killed after being Embiggen, would it leave their giant corps, or would it undo? That will have to be learned naturally later, probably part of the scars of some city from when that happened. Or some lakes in the vague pattern of footprints, even if eroded they still line up. Their clothing might even still be around, if it comes with the ritual. Add that to artifacts of Zenovia’s, old tower sized armoured heels left somewhere, or a full suit, or such.
And I do recommend looking up any dnd store channels on Youtube or r/DnD so you can get more inspiration that I could probably fit into a whole story’s worth of reviews. Get stuff for the background or encounters. Whatever you think is cool or good.
And a patron avatar of Tiamat art, cause it looks good, spent ages looking for it just for this, cause it what made me think of whatever dragon deity and Zenovia discussing about their followers overlapping:https://nitter.net/ishton/status/1385648294853029898
Author's Response:
The dwarves here are sort of steampunk/science focused relative to the setting's other races, though far on the frontier their more impressive achievements aren't visible. Of course try convincing people of germ theory in a world where evil spirits and curses actually exist, I imagine those dwarven medical pioneers have many frustrating talks with the setting's priests and mages.
Rumana will appear later in the story yes
Obviously there are some heavy DnD and general fantasy RPG tropes heavily influencing this one. I'm well familiar with them, so don't worry on my account!
Anyways as for Embiggen I imagine you'd go back to normal if you got killed while it was active, though the giant footprints might still be out there from whenever it was last used though. The giant growth thing would be a rarely used thing even for Zenovia's followers, as Vann notes it's extremely lengthy and difficult to pull off.