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Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 19 2022 2:11 AM Title: Chapter 1

D&D is no longer the game for nerds.  What a fun "little" story.

I especially like how Monica and Spencer are finally together, in a cage that Tabitha easily locked them both in and carried around effortlessly; and that shrunken Monica is now twice the size of tiny Spencer who is now under her control.

I love that Marty realized he wanted to be under the power of sniffing Tabitha's worn panties, and how he eventually ended up in the pair she is wearing then inside of her.

One thing that was a bit confusing, but addressed as the story continued, was what pair of Tabitha's worn panties he was drawn into sniffing.  You did not mention that Tabitha produced a pair of her previously worn panties, and it seemed as if he might be sniffing the pair she is currently wearing.  As the story progressed, one could figure out there are two different panties, those that he sniffed but she was not wearing, then the panties Tabitha is wearing and dropped him inside of.

Really fun story.



Author's Response:

Yeah sorry for any confusion there, it is intended that it is a pair she had previously worn and she's using as a game prop, found during Marty's "search" of the witch's quarters, and she's wearing a different pair. Anyways glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: MrD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 18 2022 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 1

Honestly the only thing I would critique is that it's a one-shot! I'd love to read more about the group's shenanigans with such a persuasive and dedicated DM.



Author's Response:

It's a premise I might reuse for a longer story at some point, or maybe a continuation. As it is though I don't have any plans to continue it right now, glad you liked it though!

Reviewer: zbh Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 18 2022 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 1

I thought it was a nice one shot! I’m biased to DnD and loved the storytelling. 



Author's Response: Thanks, I'm a fan of tabletops myself.

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