[Report This]Date: June 11 2022 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 3
Really great story, and quite the twisted play of Shirley Jackson's "The Lottery".
I love the drawn out shrinking process. This makes it more realistic that a secretive medical procedure is taking place that will reduce his size, as opposed to a magical flash of mysterious light. Plus it lends to the reader experiencing the shrinking process {would one rather die quickly and be done with, or die slowly, minus any pain, and have the opportunity to review one's life over before going?} and go through every possible thought at their conversion.
You have a few grammatical errors, and substitute "he" / "him" for "she" / "her" every now and then; but nothing confusing that distracts from your story. Very well done.
Looking forward to future chapters.
Author's Response:
Thank you your your review. Like barabba9000 said, its an old story. I'm not the author. English is not my native language. This is maybe the reason why i did not recognize the grammatical errors you mentioned. :)
The other chapters are coming soon.