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Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 20 2022 1:57 AM Title: Maya's Massive Mishap

Good story, but you need to work on your paragraphs.  Your story is a little bit hard to follow because you combine statements and subjects into one paragraph rather than dividing them into separate paragraphs which would clarify who is saying what and what action is going on.

Other than that, an interesting story.

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