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Reviewer: AVA Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 20 2022 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 5

It seems like it's part of a series but i'm only familiar with this one... But I liked it! I guess I'll read the others while waiting for the next one...



Author's Response:

thanks!

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2022 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 1

Clearly a commission, but the author did an exceptional job taking the framework and adding a enough nuance to make the characters as believable as they can be. So many of these smut-focused works skip the little things. Plus it was really hot, in a fucked up kinda way lol.

Author's Response:

thanks, i did my best!

Reviewer: Applebottomj Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06 2022 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 2

Any plans to post the rest of the story here in the future?



Author's Response:

yes! the full story is coming, sorry i've just been really busy and havent updated much of anything here over the last 6 weeks or so

Reviewer: HereForthePlot Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: March 15 2022 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 2

The “with Jackie” series has always been the representation of the Jekyll and Hyde nature of fetish stories for me. As the giantess fetish is largely femdom (there might be some rare gems in the form of a submissive giantess), the stories often necessitate that our tiny protagonists to be forced into sexual situations. 
The problem, however, is many of the authors have the innate desire to provide reasons for the tiny to be put in these situations. When done good enough, the author will simply admit just because. The sister/mother/friend or stranger is just evil or cares more about their own enjoyment. Or perhaps the tiny likes it. When done really well, it’s because of some complex character building or emotional trauma the perpetrator has gone through.
But when done poorly, the reason is half hearted and doesn’t commit to what it might be trying to say. What do I mean?
Our main character here has, in the multiple titles of this series, acknowledged to himself and to Jackie that what he’s going through is undeserved. A normal response from someone who features as the victim in these stories. My problem comes in the form of Jackie normally but especially her and her friend here. The first chapter was absent of any fetish material and instead we got a look at our protags feelings on his past trauma. Victimized by his sister and unknowingly his mother, he rightfully concludes that he should cut her off. Interesting! His previous interactions with her were normal (before the shrinking) and he was obligated to show up for family reasons. But in this third story he’s not obligated to see her, has a very good reason to cut her off, and is honestly not really in danger of her revenge unless he went back to her. The only reason he would go to her would be a very good reason I’m sure.
it’s a hair tutorial. The trauma this man went through and the author described in detail was washed away because Jackie pretended like nothing was wrong in sending a hair tutorial. If there was consideration in demonstrating that the protagonist’s mind was broken in any way then maybe i could understand. But he vehemently denied any sort of acquiescence to his sister’s logic, or lack thereof. He, in the first but more strongly in the second story, doesn’t believe he’s done anything wrong. And in this third act, he actually didn’t. 
What is the point of this? Abrupt personality changes are common in stories involving family members in this site. Authors wish to have the image of a normal family but also want that same loving family member to also become a psychopathic sexual deviant in the very same breathe. And while some stories do a very good job of showing that this was just a perversion of the normal love one has as a result of the power they hold over said loved one (The Blackmail series from Jacksmith) others do the switch with no reasonable explanation if any.
An author must commit to Jekyll or Hyde. Either focus on smut or if you wish to introduce complex relationships, make the reason behind the change palatable or not. Just don’t half ass it or it just leaves a bad taste. 
I know i know this is just erotica and the primary focus should be on that. But this is just the personal opinion of someone who’s just here for the plot.

Author's Response:

Hey look, I completely agree with you. But this was a commissioned story, so I had to think of some reason for him to return, and I wasn't allowed enough words to make it dozens of pages long. I'm often aware of character inconsistencies or plot devices that don't make sense in my stories, especially the commissioned ones, and sometimes I'm able to work through them with the client, sometimes not. Sometimes working through them would mean not having a story at all (such as this one). But my job--literally--is to write it anyways, so I write the best I can come up with in an amount of time that wouldn't make the entire endeavor a waste, knowing that the majority of readers won't even care about the plot anyways (I've done polls on that before).

I'm not trying to knock on my client by any means; some people care less about the plot, and when you're paying someone to write a story for you I'd imagine you wanna "get to the good stuff" even faster (sometimes if the setup for a commission I write is too long I get self conscious and worry that they'll feel like they wasted money). And caring less about the plot is totally OK.

Anyways I'm appreciative of the review, but I'm in the position of completely agreeing with you but not really being able to do anything about it 🤷🏽r05;a92;a039; I'm in charge of most of the plot, but none of the story, if that makes sense. Or maybe it's the other way around lol. But yeah, either way, thanks for the review haha

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