Date: March 06 2024 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Players
Not sure how I've missed this story so far but I freaking love it! Hopefully the next chapter comes quick! Well done!
Author's Response:
Thanks for encouraging words. This was finished long ago but I neglected posting the chapters after I went on a business trip and sort of forgot all about it. But I will finish this off soon so stay tuned.
Date: February 19 2022 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Players
I like what you're doing with the story. It's pretty interesting and I am curious to see where it goes.
A piece of constructive criticism I'd like to give is that you have long stretches of dialogue which isn't inherently bad, good dialogue is important for a story like this. But, I'd advise you to add some descriptors in there to spice it up like Kelly smiling or Matt looked away. Something to add more flavor to the flow.
[Report This]Date: February 04 2022 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Players
A very potent setup! Hope he's rather unlucky at cards while the girls get tipsy and kinky.
Author's Response:
Thanks. We'll see what happens when the cards are laid out. ;)
[Report This]Date: February 03 2022 11:20 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet the Players
Looking forward to this one. Sounds really interesting especially because there are siblings involved
Author's Response:
The siblings appear not only for this story but to set up for more stories. I'm not sure if they'll ever get posted since I'm still working on them, but let me know if that's what you want; just wait for this one to finish to see if that's what you like.
I have bunch of stories I've been working on and it would help to know what everyone would like.