[Report This]Date: May 23 2021 3:21 PM Title: A Brand New World
Great writing. I love the details, development, smooth transitions and thought patterns.
Keep up the superb work.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the review! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story, and I seriously appreciate your kind words about my writing. I'll definitely keep it up, so I hope you'll continue to enjoy it! Thanks again.
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 22 2021 8:15 PM Title: Jennifer, Part 2
Fucking hell that was one hell of a chapter and that ending was so good. It was great seeing them interact but it was pretty scary how Jen acted when she had Brain in her hands, it was like some yandere type shit and it gave me some bad vibes but I’m glad Elizebeth caught it quick and seemingly nipped it in the bud, but I have a feeling it's going to become an issue in the future. It was a little scary when she found out the Allie was the chev he was sent to God forbid she finds out about the torture and Cass cause that is not gonna be pretty. And goddamn, really showing how little faith he has in his mother with those last few lines, ouch. I didn’t think Brain was going to meet his mom so soon or maybe he won't, you kinda ended it on a cliff hanger but whatever happens I’m excited.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it! For sure, Jen has some issues that are rising to the surface. Hard to blame her, after everything she's been through. It'll definitely come up again, so I hope you'll find it interesting. For now, though, we'll shift focus a bit to Brian's mom. He has absolutely zero faith in her, that's for sure.
I always enjoy a good cliffhanger! Maybe a bit too much. Regardless, you never have to wait very long for my next updates, so hopefully it isn't too bad. Thanks again for your continued reviews, and I hope you enjoy what happens next!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 22 2021 1:33 PM Title: Jennifer, Part 2
Long time lurker since around when The Titan Empire stuff was on this site so I've preformed a ressusitory procedure on my account to leave a review starting with a question, are you Hamilton? because you're non stop with the quality writing.
Additionally I've really enjoyed and am impressed by the way you've used shrinking as less of a story focus and more of a device to tell a story about relationships, trauma and political machinations.
I cut it off there because I started rambling but the long and short of it is I like the way you write and am eager to read more of it as it comes.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for reading, and the review! I'm honored to have received the first review on your account, and I really appreciate your kind words. Although I'm certainly no Hamilton, I'm just a young adult of questionable sanity who has way too much time on his hands.
I'm really glad you're enjoying the plot and character elements of the story! Absolutely, this is less a shrinking story and more a story with shrinking elements. I think the giantess genre creates plenty of opportunities for non-erotic stories and plotpoints, so I wanted to try giving that a shot. I'm really happy you're enjoying it, and I hope you enjoy where we go from here!
-Pluto
Date: May 22 2021 5:56 AM Title: Jennifer, Part 2
Jen overcame her obsessive-ness and protectiveness, handing Brian back to Allison with just a slight hiccup. But here comes the big crossroads. Jen told Lauru Bentley she was going to see her brother and let her be the driver to tag along. Her intentions might be good but this is already a serious breach of trust. Out of all the characters in the story, Laura Bentley is one of the one's I least expect to act rationally. Jen's probably going to make a plea about how guilty and remorseful their mother has been, and how it would be better if Brian forgave her. He might agree to it down the road, but I really doubt he's ready for it today. He was scared to let Jen see him so small and vulnerable, I'd wager he'd be furious to let Laura see him in that condition given she contributed to it and made him break down mentally for three years.
The worst part is I have a fear that Laura might not walk away if Brian refuses to see or speak with her. There's always a chance she'll try to call the police/something like the Child Protective Services about her reduced son being in the hands of strangers and just generally stir-up trouble trying to get him back because she thinks it's the right thing to do. Brian's trying to remain hidden for his own safety, and Laura may set of a fog light on him and the girls. It wouldn't surprise me if Elizabeth puts her foot down and refuses to let Laura in to see him at this time. Here's hoping Jen doesn't push when Brian puts his foot down, and Laura respects him needing his distance from her until he's healed mentally and cured physically.
Author's Response:
Yeah, this is a pretty important moment. Jen obviously had her reasons, but she really should have kept it to herself. Seeing as how Elizabeth is currently the only one (aside from Jen) who knows that their mom was brought along, she certainly won't sit still. You're also right about Brian, he has absolutely no desire to see his mother, which both she and Jen will certainly have opinions about. As for how everybody will react, we'll find out soon. Thanks for reading, and I hope you enjoy how it progresses.
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 22 2021 3:00 AM Title: Jennifer, Part 2
Good stuff, and what a note to leave it on, in a good way of course. Here we go!
Author's Response:
Yes indeed! Thanks for the review, and I hope you enjoy what happens next.
-Pluto
Date: May 21 2021 5:56 PM Title: A Brand New World
This series has been great from the get go. The fact that a tiny man is being helpled and protected by so many giant women is a fun and heartwarming change from the stories I usually read. Then again I prefer gentle stuff.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I love gentle stories where the tiny has to be protected, too. Probably an obvious thing to say, since that's what I decided to write about... anyway, it gives me the warm and fuzzies. I wouldn't say I'm annoyed by it, but it does sometimes feel like most of the stories on this site are about mean/cruel giants, which can get a little old for me. So, I wanted to try something a little different. I'm really glad you're enjoying it!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 21 2021 4:16 AM Title: Jennifer
I read chapter 2 last night then went to bed and I get home from work and now we have a chapter 3, I forget how fast you work. I was a little annoyed with Brain at first, I didn’t really understand why he didn’t want to see his sister at soon as possible, I felt that he should understand how much good it would do Jen if he just talked to her since he’s the caring older brother, I know he cares immensely about her but it kind of seemed a little callus but now I can understand not wanting to be seen in such a state. He was her protector, the one person in the world she could count on and if I was in Brian’s shoes, I wound be more than embarrassed.
We are finally introduced to Cassandra Day and I'm not sure what to think, on one hand she the women who spear headed the campaign against the SP so that major points with me, but then again, she’s also a politician and scheming is kind of what they do. She seems like she really cares about Brain and she doesn’t seem like a bad person at all but I got to see more of her.
And now Brain finally speaks to Jen and it was everything I wanted but I guess it was only half of what I wanted since they didn't speak in person. It's nice to see Brian comfort Jen, even after everything he has been through that caring brother is still there.
Ps I hope you're doing better after what happened and I’m glad you’re back
Author's Response:
Yep, I'm a pretty quick tip-tap-typer. Helps when I don't have much else going on, which is very much the case right now. I'm excited to get my ideas posted, so it all works out.
Yeah, Brian is really reluctant to let her see him so small and vulnerable. Like he said, she has an expectation of him as the strong, caring older brother. However, like you said, he really needed to talk to her, so luckily he didn't wait too long.
For sure, you always have to be wary with politicians - especially ones that have so much to gain from Brian's cooperation. She definitely does genuinely care about him, though, so she's not *too* suspicious. We'll see if that changes as the story goes on.
I'm glad you enjoyed their reunion! Had to start with a phone call, considering Brian's feelings about being small, but the in-person meeting is up next. I hope you enjoy it as well! And absolutely, Brian will always be her big brother before anything else, regardless of his size or what happened to him. I'm glad you liked how he comforted her.
Yeah, I'm doing better now! At least to the point where I can write. I learned that my condition makes it hard to type at my desktop, but I remembered that I have a laptop that I never use. So, I've been using that to type, and it's been working out. Again, I really appreciate your concern, and I'm glad to be back. I hope you enjoy what happens next!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 21 2021 1:23 AM Title: Jennifer
man im really invested in this. The emotional part of me is wodnering if jenn will ever find out what her and brians mom said to him. Like each time im reminded of that it gives me chills. like honestly given how his character has developed, i just cant see him forgiving her and tbh i wouldnt want him to. The mom has to realize what he felt, experience what he went through. Man this series has been soooo good! Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for reading! I'm really glad to hear that you're invested, that always serves as great motivation to keep writing. Your instinct with Brian is right on, he has no intention of forgiving her - or even seeing her - anytime soon, if ever. He will end up meeting her at some point soon, though, so I hope you'll find it interesting. I'm glad you're enjoying the series!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 14 2021 6:17 PM Title: A Brand New World
Im sorry youre going through that right now pluto, take as much time off as you need we arent going anywere.
Get well soon
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for your concern, I really appreciate it. Flare-ups happen sometimes, and I'm hoping it's just because of stress due to finals. Until then, just gotta take it easy. I hope to have more chapters up soon! Thanks again for your kind words.
-Pluto
Date: May 03 2021 2:16 PM Title: A Brand New World
Welcome, and thank you for your consideration, I hope you don't feel obligated to do anything on my account. The story is yours, write what you enjoy.
Date: May 02 2021 3:00 PM Title: A Brand New World
Thanks for the kind response, you bring up valid points. In the end,the story is yours, so please take my comments with a grain of salt. Do with it as you will and have fun. I look forward to reading more to see how characters develop. I appreciate your responses, it's always possible I can be wrong about my opinions, or jump-the-gun-so-to-speak, so your patience is very heartening. Your writing is indeed very thought provoking, as are your comments.
Author's Response:
No worries at all, like I said I really appreciate your thoughts! She's a tough character for me to navigate, so I hope you enjoy the direction I have planned. I can assure you though, I will never try to justify her actions, or treat them as anything other than abusive and cruel. Thank you for your kind words, it means a lot that you're finding my stuff to be thought provoking. I hope you enjoy where we go from here!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 02 2021 1:00 AM Title: A Brand New World
This was unexpected but not un-welcomed. I'll be looking forward to the official beginning of this story!
Author's Response:
A surprise to be sure, but a welcome one, perhaps? I'm glad to hear you're looking forward to the official beginning! Hopefully soon. Until then, I'm really glad to have you back!
-Pluto
Date: May 01 2021 4:37 PM Title: A Brand New World
I'm glad this story is back. That said, I have two things to say, one, I'm hoping there will be more info as to how Brian was revealed to be innocent, and two, and this is just my personal opinion, I don't know how to feel about his mom feeling guilty, it seems completely out of character for the way she was described in the first part of the series, I just don't find it believable. I'd have less trouble believing she didn't regret anything and Jennifer left her for it, that would actually be more satisfying in a weird way, since the whole "everybody being-happy-together-sunshine-and-rainbows-idea just seems off, I mean, the earlier part made it seem like his Mom was utterly disgusting and beyond redeption, let alone feelings of remorse. Sometimes families need to leave toxic family members to be happy family, and I just feel like that would have been more believable, I'm having trouble suspending my disbelief.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! I'm glad to have you back, and I seriously appreciate the feedback. Brian's mom is a tough character to navigate for me, so I'm definitely paying attention to how people react to her. So, I'll just explain my thought process a bit, if that's okay~
So, the flashbacks of her being awful in prison, as well as her fight with Brian, took place three years prior to the start of the story. The only current action we've seen of her so far is when she stated on TV that she didn't care about Brian's death, since he's no longer her son. Obviously a horrible thing, and I'm not about to excuse that, but one could make the argument that she was doing that to protect herself and Jen (again, not a justification, just an explanation). Outside of that, a long time has passed since she became the sole guardian of her daughter. So, I thought some change wouldn't be a huge leap, but I obviously could be wrong.
As for Jen, the unfortunate truth is that she has nowhere to go. She's still a minor, and like Brian said in part 1 they have no other family. So, even though their mom is toxic, it's not so easy to get away from her. I'm 2000% with you, though, sometimes people need to cut toxic family members out of their lives. However, it's also important to remember that a lot of people simply can't do that easily, due to outside circumstances. Which absolutely sucks!!
So, basically I just thought it made sense for her to be remorseful. I kinda felt like making her 100% mean and indifferent would make her too one-dimensional, if that makes sense. So, yeah, those were my thoughts. Sorry for the super long response haha, but I've obviously given it a lot of thought! I fully accept that I might have made a bad call, though.
Lastly, though, I do have to say that it's very premature to say that I'm going for a "everybody happy together sunshine and rainbows" thing. She hasn't even spoken with Brian yet, so I hope you'll see how that goes before making a judgement. Regardless, thank you so much again for your thoughts! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
-Pluto
Date: May 01 2021 7:46 AM Title: A Brand New World
Whew, it's a relief Brian got his "I'm alive, just very smol" video out so quickly. Jen was giving me a worrying suicidal vibe after learning her dead brother was innocent all along for certain. And it gave me a chuckle that Senator Day reached out to Jen, but snubbed Laura Bentley, especially if she knew before calling Jen that Brian was alive. I'm a little confused about Brian saying he's permanently shrunk in his video, unless that's just a jab to pull at people's heartstrings. I see the Senator pouncing on that during her "End the Shrink Penalty" preseidential campaign. "Good news everyone! I, Senator Day, have reached out to scientists who say they can restore poor Brian Bentley. That's right! Senator Day has helped your little hero!"
I wonder if Brian will refuse to see Jen until he's restored to his real size. He'll almost certaintly at least call her or video chat with her, but I wonder if he's too scared to let her see her big brother so vulnerable like that.
Personally, I'm all for a good grudge. But I think the story will head towards reconciliation instead. Don't know what she'll do to earn it, her last word with him is that she'd happily kill him herself, and the day after his execution reporters asked for her statement and she said she didn't care that he was dead since he was no longer her son. I think the chance of Laura being allowed back into Brian's life will depend on how Jen feels about how she's been acting in the past 3 years. Still, you could let Allison or Elizabeth get a few good hits in when Laura tries to see her son again.
Author's Response:
Right? Although, Jen's mental trauma has now been replaced with a *different* mental trauma, so she's not feeling good no matter what.
As for the permanent thing, it was definitely to create hella sympathy for him. Also, they have to play into what the audience believes. The whole 'not permanent' thing is a closely guarded secret, so they can't just let that slip on national TV. Of course, it also presents an opportunity for the senator to become a hero, for sure!
As for a reconciliation or not, just know that I'm not ever going to try and justify her actions, or create quick forgiveness just for the sake of the plot. Brian isn't about to forgive her any time soon, and as he said in part 2, he doesn't even want to meet with her at all. Jen will definitely influence that, though, so I hope you'll find it interesting. Glad to have you back!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 01 2021 6:32 AM Title: A Brand New World
Man, I don’t know what I’m feeling right now. I’ve been so excited for the third part and now that it's here I feel so happy and this first chapter is everything I wanted and more. I feel vindicated go figure; I mean Brian's innocence and the fact that he’s alive is revealed and all I feel is giddy. But then we get to Lauren and Jen and I have some mixed fucking emotion. On one hand, I wanted nothing more than for Lauren to feel even a fraction of what Brain felt and I got it but I don’t feel as good as I thought I would. Don’t get me wrong I feel good but just not that good like I feel bad for her, I never thought I would feel bad for her what the fuck, good job for that one. Seeing her recognize how fucked up she was and how much of a monster she was especially in her final moments really fuck me but this line for some reason beyond my comprehension really fucking made me sad man
He needed his mother, she thought.
He was alone and scared. He needed his mother. He needed me.
This hit me hard fuck me, man. Oh man even writing about this makes me tear up God damn.
Now with Jen, my feeling is simpler, I feel terrible for her and the roller coaster of emotions she's going through especially at seven fucking teens holy shit. Holy fuck man this entire family is going to need years of therapy and maybe some family therapy. Fuck man you were right though nothing will ever be the same.
10/10 would cry again.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the review, and I'm glad the first chapter didn't disappoint! I know what you mean, genuine remorse and sadness makes it harder to feel like you're getting 'revenge.' That was my intent, to create conflicting feelings, so I'm glad it came through for you. (With that being said, it's mainly to create more drama, I'm not going for a redemption thing.)
As for her 'needed his mother' thought, that made me emotional, too! And that's because It's heavily inspired by a scene from The West Wing, in which one of the characters (Mrs. Landingham) talks about her sons who died in Vietnam. No joke, that scene makes me cry every time. I'm glad the emotion resonated with you!
And yeah, Jen is absolutely going through a lot. She seriously needs a break, and she *definitely* needs some therapy, too. As her big brother points out, she's just a kid.
Again, thanks for the review! I hope you enjoy where we go from here.
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: May 01 2021 4:09 AM Title: A Brand New World
That's one longass teaser, lol. Didn't expect you so soon, but good to have you back all the same. Oh, and as far as this chapter goes, you knocked it out of the park. Couldn't put it down, it felt like I was in the room with them. I hated his mom in parts 1 and 2, yet somehow, you made me want to give her a big hug in this one. Fantastic job.
Author's Response:
You know what, you're right. Maybe I should have called it the prologue instead. Oh well, no take-backsies.
I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter! I'm definitely really interested to see people's reactions to his mom in this story, so I'm glad you're feeling sympathetic towards her. I hope you enjoy the future chapters!
-Pluto