Date: May 29 2009 3:30 PM Title: My little finale
I gotta admit, I'm a little sad to see this story end. I missed the previous chapter, so this review is going to be a bit longer than usual. Deal with it.
Miniature Apologies was a very appropriate name for the second to last chapter. It was nice to see Kim and Bobby patch things up somewhat gradually. I liked that bit about him fearing Kim was going to pull her hand away as he was about to step onto it. It seemed like groundless paranoia until the history between the two was revealed. After that, I couldn't really blame Bobby for having trust issues. I still really liked Kim's character, despite the less than flattering revelation.
This addition also gave a whole new relevance to Sarah's friendship lecture from a couple of chapters ago. It was really just an apology in advance for what she was about to do. Brilliant foreshadowing.
I was thinking Kim was going to switch places with Bobby at the end of the story...right up until she said she would do it. It was still a very poignant moment, though.
And now for the finale. Yes, it was somewhat abrupt, but I wouldn't have brought it up if you yourself hadn't. It really couldn't be helped. Jen's story couldn't be brought to light any earlier, nor could Andy have been introduced until said story was revealed. It was a lot to throw into one chapter, but it worked. Besides, like you said, there was plenty of depth and loose end tying to make up for the abruptness.
In this chapter more than any other, you successfully demonstrated how insignificant three inches in height can be. Bobby's attempts to find Jen and get her attention really drove home how pathetically small he was. Though I would like to know where he found the strength to push that T.V. over, but that's just a knit pick.
You captured the conflicting emotions of both Bobby and Jen amazingly well in this chapter. It was very involving to read their confrontation, and the reader can really feel for both the characters. It also made the ending a lot more satisfying. That ending was my second guess, by the way (no, seriously!).
I cracked up at the tea bags line.
Author's Response: Well Im certainly glad youve been a fan of this story for such a long time, and I wouldn't completely count this concept out... I may or may not make a sequel to this, I need some time to think of a plot. The reason why a sequel would be so hard is, I'd want to incorporate the perspectives of 3 other characters for it to work, in other words, me jen and kim would have completely seperate adventures that would tie together, but im not sure how well that would work out. I might do something like it in the future though
Date: May 29 2009 12:37 PM Title: My little finale
P.S.----thanks for sharing this. If it was your debut, here, then I think it safe to say your popularity is assured.
Author's Response: lol thank you very much but as a matter of fact this is far from my debut, Ive got 8 other stories, including a couple I have yet to finish
[Report This]Date: May 29 2009 12:35 PM Title: My little finale
SNIFF! I just love happy endings. :-)
Date: May 28 2009 8:33 PM Title: My little finale
Must say this story is one great masterpiece. I haven't seen many stories quite like this and was enjoyed with it all the way through. Its amazing how one small idea with no direction can suddenly turn to such a wonderful story. The ending had me in smiles and felt it was appropiate for this piece. There really ins't much more there could be done but that does not mean I wouldn't liek to read more.
Defently a fine read to any Giantess fans even if the giant portion isn't your thing. Awesome work man.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2009 2:32 AM Title: My little finale
A very fun story to read from the very start. You did a grate job on it. And it had a happy ending also. Is something that i love very much.
Good job.