[Report This]Date: August 28 2021 8:51 PM Title: Chapter 7
WHOA! I can't believe I read all seven chapters straight through. To describe them as "riveting" would be a masterpiece of understatement!
The closest comparison I can make to more canonical sci-fi would be the "I. Mudd" episode of the original STAR TREK series. But, remade as a serial drama for A&E. In fact, if memory serves, there was something like that about three years ago! With William Heard and a Sino-English acrtress named Gemma Chesterton(?).
[Report This]Date: August 24 2021 11:12 AM Title: Chapter 7
Nice addition ...
as for your question ... I think you should leave it with couples that are already started, your right too many people could twist the story around and potentially confuse the reader and the writer for that matter.
Yolanda is an interesting addition, but she might be better served as one of the other workers bots instead.
Though ultimatedly your decision, I believe you should keep up the style your doing thus far and really dive deep into the direction you wanna take this story ... its really good, and definately has me waiting every time for the next installment
looking forward to the next chapter, hopefully not too long of a wait
Date: August 24 2021 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 7
I say Yolanda should wear your hero home in her shoe. A nice, stuffy office type shoe, an extremely tight sandwiching between insole and footsole, he unable to move or make a squeak, especially when Yalonda's weight is on him!
Your hero will be ready to capitulate to anything after that sort of an ordeal. ;)
Loving your story!
Date: August 23 2021 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 7
I'd love to see you expand the number i volved! It could get busy but it's also not something you see on here too often, so I think it'd be interesting. A nice change of pace!