Date: April 18 2020 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 5
I liked that Hannah reached for her and then changed her mind on how to lift her. I enjoyed your story. It was well written. I look forward to seeing more of your writing.
Author's Response:
Thank you for all you're reviews! I'm glad you liked it.
Date: April 18 2020 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 4
Nice chapter. What about using a cloth in the shoe box? Wouldn't a sweater be too big?
Author's Response:
Yeah, it would take up less space for sure, but it wouldn't be as soft and warm as a sweater! :) Let's say it was a big shoebox, haha
Date: April 18 2020 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 3
Cool chapter. Loved Hannah's Hand. What made it go dark? Did Hannah close her hand? Wish Hannah wore more stylish shoes.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Emily passed out and that's what made it go dark. Sorry if it was hard to figure out, I'll try to avoid this kind of confusion in the future.
Date: April 18 2020 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 2
I would have liked a better description of the blondes shoes. Wish She had stayed.
Date: April 18 2020 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
Nice start. I know her size. Will the blonde woman notice her? Enjoying this.
Date: April 15 2020 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
I really like your story . You should keep going or create Other story like that . Gentle story
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kind words! I am currently writing another story. That one will have some gentle in it aswell.
[Report This]Date: April 10 2020 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 4
Great stuff.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot!
Date: March 23 2020 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
so far very good would like the next chapter as soon as possible cause it sounds like a good story
Author's Response:
Thank you for the feedback! Chapter 2 will go up as soon as I finish it, probably today or tomorrow.