[Report This]Date: May 20 2022 10:26 AM Title: Clinic
Gosh,I felt in my heart the surprise Cain must have felt... to see Steph full of scars and all... two victims, one rescuing another and... as far as I can tell from your great story (another great story of yours, btw), he's rescuing her too, being the one to fully understand her pains and story. That plot twist was truly unexpected, I'm surprised!
Despite being an abandoned project now, the way it's written already makes up for a full story, with one or two changes in the last paragraphs to cut the sudden expectation of something to happen...
Author's Response:
Most of my stories end up being abandoned projects lol, I try to write short stories now and hopefully get my point across before it's too late.
I will, however, say my daydreams are more beautiful than anything I could ever type. I just don't have the motivation to finish anything anymore.
I think I'm a fan of damaged characters helping each other sometimes.
Thanks for another review, I'm happy to see them every time you post. Take care! :)
Date: January 20 2020 8:04 PM Title: Clinic
I liked the start of this story. I'm interested in seeing how they get comfortable with each other and start to coax more backstory out of each other.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I appreciate the feedback.
But you're putting too much faith in me. I'm not great at describing things. However I will say the story will have a happy ending. I know that much for sure.
I'm just trying to find a cadence again. I want these characters to develop some life but things seem to lose translation from my brain to the story text.