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Reviewer: 789654ar Signed [Report This]
Date: April 22 2015 4:42 PM Title: The Find

Hmm, it looks OK so far, but it could be more descriptive. It just seems a little... too quickly paced. Try to add more though!

Reviewer: mjfan45 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10 2015 6:07 AM Title: The Find

nice setup!!!! but one thing tho please do not make katie have big muscles... it just doesnt look right to me anyway

Reviewer: Mcpoax Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10 2015 12:16 AM Title: The Find

Feels rushed and hyperactive,  wherever it's going,  it's going in a hurry but can it keep it up the whole story? It will have to either be very short or fall flat.  Also intro is garbage and your charecters have no depth,  just because you choose to write sexual fantasies doesn't mean you shouldn't expand 

Reviewer: paerslemone Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09 2015 5:16 PM Title: The Find

I halfway thought about taking this on, but since you did I guess I won't.  Unless, can you have 2 stories to the same challenge at once?



Author's Response:

You should try it if you want to. It'd be nice to see someone else having a go!

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