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Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2012 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 1

This was better than I expected. The description was good, but too much, although in many places the speech was on the same line as the description and this sometimes made your story hard to follow. Overall a decent story.

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