Date: July 21 2021 3:14 PM Title: Beginning of Dark Times
How did the third chapter pass me by? I need to correct that.
“That’s a good offer, merchant man! I bet Arthur or Rook would have taken you up on that in a second. But I told you already. I don’t wanna make tiny things grow bigger…” - They would've taken the offer and killed Miryh anyway.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2021 1:48 PM Title: Source of Dark Times
"In fact, the jail could be counted as temporary lodging, so he might just charge for that too!" - That's just evil.
"That’s when Miryh realized. Jyi wasn’t the word for ‘bean’; that was myaz. So what was the spell intended to do. He was sure he knew the word jyi from somewhere. But then he had a realization. Jyi was the word for ‘oak tree’." - So my thought what Miryh screwed up in his translation was completely wrong.
What is with Miryh's self-image? The situation was bad, I made it worse, they've to see now that they should've helped me from the start. What?
I certainly didn't expect Cock Insertion. One would think that the newly grown giants would take a little while to start to abuse their newfound power. Granted, maybe this partucular guy was just vain to begin with.
Author's Response:
Thanks you again for your feedback! I don't often get a chance to do an unsympathetic tiny and have really let my imagination go wild with Miryh. I think he might be my favorite miniature character I've written so far!
[Report This]Date: May 18 2021 11:04 AM Title: Origin of Dark Times
Evil Dryads? That's rare. They are normally seen as protective forest spirits after all. Granted, if your trade is Syrup - produced by cutting into trees over and over again - you would probably be at odds with them.
I am not against this story being a bit longer and the idea that our luckless Mage is rather unskilled (normally not a mage at all) and tries a spell he probably massively misunderstood in meaning is a very good one.
I am sure what it actually said was making the caster the size of two beans compared to these hit. Which, while seeming unpractical at first, makes sense from a dryad's perpective. Grow a Badger or similar forest dwelling creature to act like your sword if you need to. Dryads as spiritual life forms don't really have bodies to fight with after all.
I expected a short, story-wise rather shallow, fun romp.
You get 10 Points for a pleasant surprise.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind words! Since the inciting incident is a territory dispute over woodland, I wanted the magic to be derived from evil forest spirits, so when I went to find what sort of creature could corrupt a forest specifically. Elf was already the protagonist's race. Treefolk was on my radar, but it seemed odd that living trees would only exist in one forest. That's when Dryad came to me. They're associated with trees and there are a few myths of them retaliating against those who wish harm upon the forest.